Ehh--
I'll admit this is the coolest flash I've seen today...but keep in mind the others have been blammed so...yeah.
To sum it up, it was just too slow and over exaggerated. I could not really hear some of the voices you threw in there. Nothing thrilling happened really. And the '2 years later' part was just a bit too slow to keep me interested.
What I didn't understand is how you put the two faces in there only once but then you don't see the faces anymore. They were just two unimportant shots! I would have cut them out if I were you, or during the establishing shot show their faces, you know?
And the last problem I spotted was the slice-shot. Too many slices. Way too many. 1 or 2 would be perfect...but it dragged.
Please don't take this as a badmouth review, I'm just critiqing it. I'd love to watch you in the future because I truly feel you can pull off some kickass stuff later. Go for it!